The Evil Eye

#BlogBattle 21 Theme: Eye

On any given day, he’d have looked the other way, but not today. Timothy couldn’t ignore it. He’d rather walk away and pretend he’d never seen it.

“Not me. Not now!”

There was no denying it. The Evil Eye was staring him in the face. He could try all manner of escape, but now the Eye had seen him it would follow wherever he went.

Everyone would see and shun him. He would soon be cast off into the great abyss with all those who’d been looked upon by the Evil Eye. Every window he passed by, every computer he came near would glare it.

Timothy could imagine the looks of horror passing over mother’s faces as they shielded their children’s eyes from his shame. He shuddered at the thought and tried to think of what he’d done to deserve the Evil Eye?

He hadn’t shared an opinion. He hadn’t jay-walked or spoke out of turn with his boss. In fact, he’d never spoken to his boss or about his boss in the fifteen years he’d slaved away in the lab.

Working conditions were far below par, but who was Timothy to say anything about it? He wouldn’t dare speak up for fear of being turned in to the authorities and seen by the Evil Eye.

Saying anything against anyone, no matter how kindly it was said, but especially in relation to the governance, was considered hate speech. The danger was too great to bother, so like most, he kept his mouth shut.

Timothy had done everything he could, every day, to avoid the Evil Eye. Yet here he was, staring at its glaring cruelty next to his own photograph on his own television screen.

He stared down at his shoes and tried not to cry. What was the point of staying in line and obeying when years of flying under the radar didn’t save you from the Evil Eye? Timothy didn’t have the foggiest clue what the answer to the question was, but he did know he didn’t want to go to the abyss.

It was dark there. Forever dark.

He shuddered.

His shoes didn’t seem to have an answer to his dilemma. He gave up staring at them on his feet. The TV screen still glared the Evil Eye at him, but he didn’t return the favor. He swiveled on his foot and walked out the door, his head held high.

Timothy marched down the street, and every person he passed gave him a quick glance but looked away. He looked at his name badge and could see why. Instead of his name, the little electronic screen now reflected the Evil Eye.

On impulse, the next person he passed–a young lady with mousey brown hair and glasses–he grabbed her arm.

“Do not believe the Evil Eye. It is a lie! A lie!”

She screeched and yanked her arm free of his grasp.

Timothy stepped out into the street, he stood in the center, stopping all traffic. He started yelling at the top of his lungs. “The truth can’t be hidden behind silence! Don’t believe you have no voice! You have a voice! Speak out! Share! Be human! Be kind!”

No sooner had he started shouting than the sound of a helicopter grew louder. Almost at once his words were drowned out by the thwapping of the blades above him.

He looked up and saw the Evil Eye reflected on the bottom of the copter and knew. They’d come for him. He’d wasted his whole life hiding behind his own silence and fear.

Someone dressed in black dropped down on a rope from above, wrapped another around Timothy who stood without moving, and dragged him into the copter.

No word was said, but for the first time, Timothy could see the truth. Every rooftop had the Eye painted upon it. The black abyss, with all its uncertainty, was better than living under the threat of the Evil Eye.

36 responses to “The Evil Eye”

  1. Oohhh….this was really good, I kinda felt like looking over my shoulder discreetly as I read it, lol, definitely felt that Big Brother vibe. 🙂

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    1. That’s perfect, Carrie Ann. Thank you. 😀

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  2. Ooh, this is good. I love the story and the message. I’m not sure I’m interpreting it right, but I feel like it’s saying “don’t live behind ear, it only ends in bad.” Or something like that that could possibly be put better. It’s Saturday morning and my words haven’t got out of bed yet 😀 But I really do like this. It could be the opener of quite a chilling tale.

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    1. What dots don’t live behind ear mean? Not a phrase in familiar with. I know what you mean about Saturday…my brain is still in bed.

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      1. Ahem. Saturday brain to blame again. I meant fear. 🙂

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        1. hahah! I was hoping I didn’t miss out on some awesome phrase. Of course, then I asked about dots not living behind the ear… It’s like a really fun game of telephone. Did you ever play that as a kid?

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          1. Never heard of Telephone. How do you play it?

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            1. Really!? Oh man, you missed out. Okay, so you sit in a circle (you can stand, too, but sitting is easier when the circle is big). One person started the telephone call by whispering a phrase in the person’s ear next to them. That person then whispers the exact same phrase to the person on their other side until the message travels all the way back around the circle to the person sitting on the other side of the initiator of the telephone call. That last person has to say the message out loud. It’s almost inevitable that the message is completely different by the time it reaches the last person and gives everyone a great laugh. You should try it some time. It can be a real hoot.

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            2. Oh! It’s Chinese Whispers! It’s amazing how the same game can have different names in different places. I did play it a couple of times as a kid, and it was hilarious. The end message was never close to what we started out with. 😀

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            3. I had no idea it had another name. 🙂

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            4. Neither did I! 🙂

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        2. And yes, that is one good interpretation. 🙂 There’s a lot packed into this short story. Maybe that’s why it feels like it should continue…to unpack it.

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          1. Yes. I think it should be continued. It’s complex, and that’s what makes it so good. 🙂

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            1. I’ll certainly keep that in mind for the future. THANK YOU! 🙂

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  3. Sorry. Haha My response was confusing. I just meant the way we use that term wasn’t exactly how I use it in the story. Giving someone the evil eye, though, I’d kind of appropriate. Haha I actually just went with this one off the top of my head. I’m always mulling over the conspiracy theory, big brother type stuff that is slowly overtaking society, all in the name is public safety. Not to mention the polarization of people and beliefs. I was really feeling it on Tuesday so that’s what I wrote. 🙂 The evil eye then becomes less spooky in that context, I think.

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  4. I like your version of the Evil Eye, it’s creepy and a bit spooky! I get a feeling there’s a message behind this story. Does the Evil Eye represent something? Either way, your writing is excellent.

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    1. Haha thanks. Not exactly how people picture it, but thanks. There could be a message behind it, and it does represent something, but at the moment I’m good with leaving that up to interpretation. I’m pleased you enjoyed my writing.

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      1. Yes, I’m sure the people picture it differently, more like a controlling force, I just meant the name and idea of an Evil Eye in general. I like spooky things. 🙂 I’ll have to work my brain’s wheels and interpret it for myself then. 🙂

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  5. Oh I hope Timothy rebels and leads others to do so as well! Great tale 🙂

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      1. You are welcome! I think that would make a great longer story.

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        1. I wrote it with all my favorite “Big Brother” type stories in mind. 😉

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  6. Interesting idea, certainly a chilling one that could be developed. Liked it.

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    1. Thanks, Marje. Appreciate the feedback. 🙂

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  7. Mommy!! Yipes! Thanks a lot, I’m never going to come out from under the covers. This was really clever. 🙂

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    1. Haha That may be the safest place. Maybe I’ll do the same.
      Thanks! 🙂

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  8. That’s it I am packing up my toys and going home! Lol! That was brill Rachael. You need to expand on this, too good to just leave as a short story. Loved the suspense and fear.

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    1. Thanks, Lucy! It’s definitely something to think about. I write every one of these short stories fully intending to write one and move on to the next, but it’s like there really Is no such thing as a 1000 word short story. Haha

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  9. Whoa. That is a lot to pack into just a thousand words. Getting that much of an idea into that short a space… Wow. o_O

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    1. Haha maybe a little too ambitious? 🙂

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      1. Not at all! It was beautifully handled. Gave me the creeps actually. 🙂

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        1. Lol. Thanks, Lauren. That’s a perfectly lovely compliment. 😀

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          1. Sincere too, which is always a bonus. Lol. XD

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