Night Shopping

Night Shopping by Bekah

#BlogBattle 49 “Lollipops”


I rushed into the store to get some groceries before it closed. I headed straight for the chips, then the meat, then the drinks.

I heard someone yell a phrase of some kind, but I just ignored it. Then the lights went out, and I heard doors lock. I grabbed my phone and turned on the flashlight. I turned around and jumped, almost dropped my phone. There was a creepy clown face, so I stepped back and turned the opposite direction.

I realized the store was closed, but I was confused. Wouldn’t they do a check around the store before they closed? Either way I saw some lollipops, grabbed some, and went looking for an exit (the lollipops would keep me calm while I ate them).

I found a door and opened it looking to see if it was a way out, but I heard someone coming. I froze and tried to hide as best as I could. Then when I realized that this room smelled like wet dog mixed with manure and vomit, I put the light from my phone near the door and saw it was the men’s restroom.

I immediately ran out of the room and headed for what looked liked the candy aisle. I ran into a figure of some kind and felt a face. I stepped back and saw the figure get closer. I took the left over lollipops from my pockets and started throwing them one at a time.

Then as soon as I ran out of lollipops I raised the light towards the figure. It was the night security man, and he was holding the lollipops I had thrown at him.
He started to lead me toward the door, but I snagged some more lollipops, quickly.

The man looked at me and said, “How crazy does this job get? Also, how stupid does this job get?”

Then he looked at me like I was completely out of my mind.
I replied with a reasonable answer, saying, “Thank you for your time, sir, and the lollipops.”

He looked at me confused and I quickly left out the door.


Bekah is my niece! 🙂

genre: Comedy/Suspense

16 responses to “Night Shopping”

  1. Nice lollipop hurling action. At least your protag had sugar to comfort them (and for defense). 🙂

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  2. The two worst things to happen: locked in the dark, and men’s restrooms! 😀 Well written, Bekah. ^_^

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  3. This is my idea of a nightmare – getting locked in a dark store with a creepy clown face. Brilliantly done. 🙂

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  4. Ha! cute! Very nice 🙂

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  5. Woebegone but Hopeful Avatar
    Woebegone but Hopeful

    Oh that was brilliant! Suspense and comedy all neatly fitting together. (From some of my visits in various hostelries I reckon the Men’s room was tastefully under-stated-lol)

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    1. Haha, Roger, I’ve smelled a few men’s rooms, and this cracked me up. Thanks for the extra imagery. haha

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  6. “Stand back I armed with lollipops and I ain’t scared to throw first and run later ha!”
    I don’t know what kinda men’s rooms you been hanging around because that description had me like yep def radioactive mutant werewolfdog men been using it lol fun stuff
    ~B

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    1. Oh man, I totally laughed out loud when I read that bit. 🙂

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  7. Ha ha ha. locked in a store is too creepy. Glad it wasn’t me. 😀 😀 😀

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    1. me, too, but that description of the men’s room! HAHAHAHA 🙂

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  8. Love creepy clown faces! Good job

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  9. “creepy clown face…” Is there any other kind? And lollipops as weapons. Nice. 🍭 Hadn’t thought of that! 😀

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