WORK IN PROGRESS! WIP-ping it out here. haha
Okay, so this is totally first draft stuff, but I thought today would be a good day (sunny and bright) to share an excerpt from my current WIP, The Treasonous. This is the third book in the Chronicles of the Twelve Realms, and it’s coming together kind of slowly, but I’m loving the characters.

If you will remember, Florian is one of the twelve guardsmen knights of High Prince Theiandar. He is from the realm of Wyeth. In The Beauty Thief we found out that he was raised south of Wyeth Castle. His nobleman father and his mother were killed when Florian and his sister were both young. They were told that raiders from Crescent Cave had murdered their parents, and they were sent to live with their uncle whose manor was near the castle. In this third novel we get to know Florian and his history a little bit more. 🙂
Draft Uno Excerpt:
Florian knew his urgency was apparent to anyone looking on, and it grew with each passing step. Now he slammed the heavy door closed and stood in the middle of his uncle’s room.
The candles glowed, flickering waves of eerie light and shadows across the walls with the swift displacement of air from his hasty entrance. The shimmer of them danced a sinister tempo in the reflection of Jeron’s eyes.
“What manner of thoughtless behavior is this, Nephew?” Jeron didn’t move from his seat by the fire, a goblet of something raised part way to his lips.
“I don’t know, Uncle. You tell me.”
Well, I find this little scene snippet thrilling in its allusion. I am going to have to get out of giddy, happy writer feelings and slide into angry, confused character vs confident, authoritarian character mode as we are preparing for a bit of an argument. 😀
If you haven’t read The Beauty Thief or Captive Hope, you can find them both on Amazon, Smashwords, B&N, Apple, Kobo, etc! The prices of both for ebook and paperback are great, and I could really use some more reviews for both.
In fact, if you are a reviewer who enjoys YA, historical, low fantasy, fairy-tale adventures with a sweet touch of romance, then let me know in the comments, and I might beg you for a review or two!
Happy Sunny Sunday!
❤ Rachael Ritchey
Am so excited for this next book in the series! Thanks for sharing a snippet with us!
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Awww, thanks E! I was excited to share. haha Glad you are excited!!!
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PS: Re-blogged.
My blog needs some class!!
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haha You are funny and fun, Roger! Thank You!
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Glad to help (and if I create a few chuckle along the way- even better)
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😀
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Reblogged this on heroicallybadwriter and commented:
Rachael Ritchley’s Third Volume of the ‘Twelve Realms is under way. These are truly entertaining and captivating books which can be read by ‘All Ages’.
Not only does Rachael write them, but creates the covers, does cool YouTube promotions and markets them.
Visit her blog not just for details on the books but also on ‘how it can be done’
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Whoo-ooo! So pleased that Volume Three is up and running. Nice to read that Florian is as intense and on edge as he was in the previous books, sometimes characters can undergo complete personality changes between books. Changing the central character from volume to volume is a good idea too, always keeps things fresh.
Al the best for the journey
Roger
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Thanks so much, Roger. 😀 Ever since his character got a nickname in The Beauty Thief I’ve had him floating around in my mind. I like focusing on some of the same characters but changing up the main one while sticking to the same world. It is fun for me, so I’m glad it keeps it fresh from a reader perspective, too. I imagine that as different people enjoy different characters they will also have different favorite books in the series as well. ❤
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And therein lies the attraction. The whole series is going to be so interesting when read in one go.
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Sounds intriguing! “I don’t know, uncle, you tell me.” Really got me on that one. 🙂
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🙂 I loved writing that line!
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I love the way you show us Florian`s urgency. The slamming of the door really works to take us straight into the snippet. Loved it.
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Thanks, Adele! I live the slamming bit, so I’m glad to hear it had that effect. 🙂
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You have certainly won me over! I’ll now have to get these. 🙂 Just in this one look I can see so much. Your visuals are amazing, and they are right in line with the types of reads I love. Thank you for being!
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Sue! Thank you so much! I truly hope you enjoy the books. It means so much to me to see you say it. 🙂 Many thanks!
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You are truly talented.
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❤
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Reblogged this on Planet Simon and commented:
Have a look at this post from Rachel Ritchey on her third book in the twelve realms series. She’s a great writer and definitely needs more exposure. Please read and support Rachael.
Simon 🙂
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I love the description in this, very moody. I’m going to re-blog this to make sure that others can see it!
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Thanks so much, Simon! I’m glad the moodiness isn’t on the negative side. ❤ 😀
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No, kinda dark, eerie
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Perfect for that moment. 🙂 Thanks for telling me how you saw it!
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It’s my pleasure! I hope by reblogging it that others will see it and and your work! 🙂
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Thoughtful to the last second of the day. Thank you!
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Last second? I still have cookies to bake and a blog battle to write! lol
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haha, see more thoughtfulness!
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I do my best… but I do like them too!
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cookies and stories! Can’t go wrong.
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Nope, always good. Night boss 😃
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Am so excited about this! Sounds fab!!!!
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Thank you, Queen L! You saying so just makes my day! ❤
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😂 sigh! Queen L!
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I may just call you Queen L forever now, just so you know. It’s fitting in the best of ways. 🙂
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Hmmmmmmm no comment! 🙂
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haha I’m going to take that as a positive assent to the new moniker. ;P
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Queen L, love it! 😀
Sorry, just had to say that.
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😀
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Awesome pos!, I love the visual elements of the flickering shadows. It makes the excerpt really stand out in my mind.
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😀 Thanks, Steven. I’m pretty good with dialogue and tend to get wrapped up in the talking without giving the scenery a good voice. I’m really trying to work on succinct, evocative scene description. I want to be able to feel the place without having to describe it in twenty thousand word paragraphs. haha I’m so happy to hear your feedback!
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