Rejected

#BlogBattle Theme: Prophet

Rejected Prophet


photo credit: Trek Earth
photo credit: Trek Earth

My bones ache from sleeping on the hard earth. There’s no avoiding the stiff movements and cracks as I work my way into a sitting position, but it is good to be alive.

It could have gone the other way, but a man took pity on me I suppose. When the first called for my stoning, I was sure it would be my last message. But the other man, he almost seemed to be listening. I sensed a contrite heart, but after escorting me to the city gate he dismissed me without a second glance.

They rejected me and laughed at the words I said, but there is no way to avoid what is to come. They’ve been warned. There is nothing else I can do, so I shall knock the dust of this place from my sandals.

The sun is not yet risen over the horizon. If I start now I can make it to the next city before the noon heat beats down upon my brow. Maybe they will hear the message of this prophet and repent. It is not too late. The Lord will make a way where there seems no way.



This is super short, I know! It seemed enough today. Been quite busy with the WIP. Finished the manuscript for Captive Hope, but still have a lot of work ahead of me! Be sure to look for #BlogBattle on Twitter or peruse the various battler blogs! 🙂

27 responses to “Rejected”

  1. Carrie Ann Avatar

    Short but sweet…with a good message!! 🙂

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks, Carrie Ann. 🙂

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  2. Marje @ Kyrosmagica Avatar

    Ah this was good. Nice piece of flash fiction.

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks, Marje! Much appreciated. 🙂

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  3. Tracey@WhatsforDinnerDoc.com Avatar

    I liked the brevity. It worked well and the message was subtle but clear.
    Tracey

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks, Tracey! 🙂

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  4. phoenixgrey85 Avatar
    phoenixgrey85

    This felt peaceful. Not sure why. I liked it. 🙂

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Nice. No reason not to feel peaceful! 🙂

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  5. Claire B. Avatar

    Really liked this one! I agree with Candice! I thought of Paul and the other Apostles. 🙂

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Woo hoo! That’s perfect. ♡

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  6. mbarkersimpson Avatar

    This was lovely, Rachael. I love when such a rich, vibrant message is conveyed in flash-fiction. It might be short, but it did its job and I thoroughly enjoyed it 😀

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Yay! Thanks, Melissa! I’m so glad to hear it. ♡

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  7. blondeusk Avatar
    blondeusk

    Liked this but was looking forward to Grecca. This was a very thought provoking piece.

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks IBFF. I was disappointed bit to do a Grecca story, but I feel like I should be a good example and do different/real short stories. I may still use the prompts to write Grecca and post on a different day. If I can find the time.

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      1. blondeusk Avatar
        blondeusk

        Oh my goodness – here am I thinking that next week I should do something different as well – we are really getting telepathic! Am worried about what other mental vibes of mine you are picking up on 🙂

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        1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

          Who knows! Continents and ocean separate us physically, but our minds are connected on an IBFF level. 😉

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          1. blondeusk Avatar
            blondeusk

            Scary stuff! When you announce you have gone blonde then I will panic

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            1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

              It could happen, but I’ll probably go gray first.

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  8. Rawls E. Fantasy Avatar

    This took me right to the book of Acts, and how truly difficult it must have been to be a prophet in their day, and yet also so rewarding! Nice story, even though I do miss Grecca. 🙂

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks! I’m glad it could give that sense! 🙂 I miss her, too. She’ll show up here again on another day some time. As soon as I find some time! haha

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      1. Rawls E. Fantasy Avatar

        Haha, them are the key words, Rachael: “finding some time” 🙂 WIPs take up all possible time! 😀

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        1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

          The simple words.

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  9. Candice Avatar

    This was PERFECT! Got the sense of Paul here. Sometimes few words are just enough 😉 Great job.

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    1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

      Thanks Candice! I was hoping I’d conveyed the story with as few words as possible. I’m going to move away from Grecca for battles, and I’m also going to have a goal of fewer words to tell my stories. We’ll see how it goes. I may still write Grecca a couple times a month just for fun, though!

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      1. Candice Avatar

        Good for you! This has been my hope for my pieces as well. I am a very long winded writer. I like the challenge of giving less but making it seem more. Hopefully both of us will accomplish our goals. And I have been seeing a lot of Elon Musk in my youtube feed…bizarre as most of what I follow on youtube has to do with food or music lol

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        1. Rachael Ritchey Avatar

          LOL got to love Google. You’ve read my blog and if you watched that one short video you’ll now be inundated with more unless you continue to completely ignore their suggestions. Here’s to goals!

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